The Daily Glance
I report outside
a motion in the line of no one:
my faults my body my legs
thought tentacles among
the rest if it rains, as it’s a desert,
stunning glistening infestations
[With no period, perhaps the next clause attaches here.]
What goes with what here? Does the list after the colon describe the motion? Are the “thought tentacles” a fourth in the series, or are the faults, body, and legs “thought tentacles”? For that matter, are the faults “my body” and “my legs” or are they equals in a series of three (or four)? What is the referent of the parenthetical expression?
The syntactical complexity continues throughout the book. At times, when it feels like we have hit a moment of narrative simplicity, it trails off in new directions.
What goes with what here? Does the list after the colon describe the motion? Are the “thought tentacles” a fourth in the series, or are the faults, body, and legs “thought tentacles”? For that matter, are the faults “my body” and “my legs” or are they equals in a series of three (or four)? What is the referent of the parenthetical expression?
The syntactical complexity continues throughout the book. At times, when it feels like we have hit a moment of narrative simplicity, it trails off in new directions.
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